leave me behind
with all your lies
all I ask for is
silence
no more whispers
shut up
Shut Up
get me out of here
what did I ever do to you
I feel myself burning up
you’re all fools
but
what if it’s not true
what if the only fool
is me
the heat blurs my vision
all I hear are whispers
Shut UP
SHUT UP!
the voices in my head
reverberate your words
a constant falling of rain
soaked I stand in smoke
the rain is too late
the fire has already burnt the bridge
your side
my side
only whispers reach me
i
SHUT
hate
UP
you
Haha, I LOVE this poem. It’s so angry, I absolutely love it! Especially the last four lines. I feel exactly like this a lot of the time. Great poem! You should post some more.
Awesome.
Words fail me in describing just how great I think this is.
So, I’ll just say: Fantastic.
I can’t guess what brought this about, but it reminds me of some of the things i think about when writing poetry. It is very similiar to some of the things i used to write and still do write
I like it for that sentimental factor. I think that some of the lines could be better written and left more dramatic. Just like “a constant falling rain” standing soacked surrounded in smoke etc etc etc etc etc etc i’m so mean to you 
I dunno the first one is just what i thought. I was like “ooo if she left out the “of” it would be more dramatic” (feels like complete ass for giving criticism) Sorry Nicole…. and i MISSED SPARE!! i feel like more of an ass.. sorry <3 I won’t miss it. hope you had a good day = D
Nicole,
I love the ending…I can picture a person with her hands over her ears, eyes clenched shut, thinking one thing, saying the other…almost impossible in writing to convey the idea of two things happening at the same time-great effect! Do you need some punctuation or did you intentionally leave it out?
JoeCool